Comments on: Writing in the Third-Person Perspective: A Guide https://www.hiddengemsbooks.com/third-person-pov-writing-guide/ ARC Book Reviews and Author Services Fri, 17 Jan 2020 23:30:59 +0000 hourly 1 By: Greg Mongrain https://www.hiddengemsbooks.com/third-person-pov-writing-guide/#comment-133243 Fri, 17 Jan 2020 23:30:59 +0000 https://www.hiddengemsbooks.com/?p=8375893#comment-133243 Your second example with Marcus and Neil is still an error. You shouldn’t switch perspectives within the same scene. There should be no mention of the 15-minute wait. Marcus can’t know that, and his is the current POV. If there’s a break in the chapter, or if a new chapter has begun, then you can switch POVs to anyone. But you need to stay there.

A more subtle (and common) error would be if Marcus described Neil as “very angry.” Technically, that’s a POV switch, too. It should read, “plainly very angry.” Again, Marcus can’t know what’s in Neil’s mind, but can determine it from his face, actions, etc. So words like “clearly” and “obviously” are often necessary to reinforce the main POV when thinking about how another character feels.

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